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【心動的文書】如何構(gòu)思PS的主線?
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指南者留學 徐萍(Fiona) 2023年03月29日 閱讀量:2247
<p style="text-align: justify;">如果說細節(jié)描述是PS的血肉,那么一個好的邏輯框架就是PS的骨架,二者共同鑄就了一篇有血有肉的個人陳述。如何構(gòu)思PS的主線?今天<strong>#心動的文書#</strong>欄目,就以一個學生的案例跟大家分享三個PS主線的構(gòu)思方法。<strong>(下劃線加粗為好詞好句,大家可以收藏積累哦~)</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><span class="h1">01 角度一:專業(yè)知識</span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">Is finance valuable as a discipline? During my first two undergraduate years, a large number of courses pertinent to math, computers, and economics once <strong><span style="text-decoration: underline;">cast doubt on</span></strong> the value of finance for me.</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong>【本科前兩年大量非金融相關(guān)的課程讓「我」開始質(zhì)疑金融作為一門學科的價值】</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">It was not until my junior year when I was extensively exposed to finance courses covering various aspects of the financial market that I began to recognize the appeal of finance. Especially in the two courses named Corporate Finance and Investment Banking, I <span style="text-decoration: underline;"><strong>marveled at</strong></span> the value that finance could create for firms and its close connections with all walks of life.</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong>【大三金融課程的相關(guān)學習使「我」對金融的魅力有了更多的理解】</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">To advance my knowledge of finance, I proactively participated in a simulated roadshow for a prestigious food and beverage company - Bestore...... At the end of this roadshow, I <strong><span style="text-decoration: underline;">got a better handle on</span></strong> the latest theoretical developments and practical applications in the corporate finance field as well as the implications of corporate finance within a global context.</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong>【從研究經(jīng)歷中得到的對企業(yè)金融的理解】</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">My internship at Great Wall Fund Management Co., Ltd. <span style="text-decoration: underline;"><strong>enlightened me on</strong></span> the complexity and diversity of the financial market......</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong>【通過實習經(jīng)歷對金融市場的復雜性和多樣性有了更深的理解】</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">With an increasing knowledge of finance, I no longer doubt its value as a discipline but have developed an unbridled passion for <strong><span style="text-decoration: underline;">embarking on a career</span></strong> in this <span style="text-decoration: underline;"><strong>fast-evolving and intellectually challenging</strong></span> realm. To be specific, I aspire to work in the Investment Banking Department of a HK securities company......</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong>【隨著對金融了解的深入,不再懷疑其作為一門學科的價值,反而想要在這個領(lǐng)域有所建樹】</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">I am sure that undertaking this programme will continuously <span style="text-decoration: underline;"><strong>update my comprehension of</strong></span> financial expertise and the global financial market. In the future, I will spare no effort to publicize the leading-edge advances in the finance industry so that more people can hold a correct attitude towards the subject of finance.</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong>【未來想要傳播金融領(lǐng)域的前沿發(fā)展成果,讓更多的人對金融這門學科持有正確的態(tài)度】</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <ul> <li style="text-align: justify;">思路:</li> </ul> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">該PS用一句&ldquo;Is finance valuable as a discipline?&rdquo;開頭,<strong>下文圍繞著「我」對于金融這門學科的逐漸深入的了解來寫的</strong>,主線為:質(zhì)疑金融作為一門學科的價值&rarr;從專業(yè)課中開始感受到金融的魅力&rarr;從研究經(jīng)歷中了解到企業(yè)金融的最新發(fā)展和實際運用&rarr;從實習經(jīng)歷中理解了金融市場的復雜性和多樣性&rarr;不再懷疑金融作為一門學科的價值,反而想要在這個領(lǐng)域有所建樹&rarr;未來想要更多人了解金融這門學科。</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><span class="h1">02 角度二:職業(yè)目標</span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">As a finance major, I aspire to work in the Investment Banking Department of a HK securities company......</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong>【「我」的職業(yè)目標】</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">As a goal-oriented student, I have made continuous endeavors to fulfill my career goals. Academically, I&rsquo;m equipped with a <strong><span style="text-decoration: underline;">well-grounded</span></strong> mathematical foundation......</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong>【為了實現(xiàn)職業(yè)目標,「我」做了持續(xù)的努力。比如學術(shù)方面&hellip;&hellip;】</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">Practically, I practised my financial expertise through relevant research projects. A noteworthy experience was a simulated roadshow for a prestigious food and beverage company - Bestore......</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong>【實踐方面,「我」也通過相關(guān)的研究項目來實踐自己的金融知識】</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">To further comprehend the financial market and hone my hands-on financial skills, I entered Great Wall Fund Management Co., Ltd. this year. As a sales intern, I ......</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong>【為了進一步了解金融市場以及鍛煉金融實踐能力,「我」進入XX公司實習】</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">Nevertheless, the expertise I have developed from these experiences is not sufficient enough for me to climb higher up my future career ladder. To reach my goals, I need further improvements in......, which can be achieved by undertaking the XX program......</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong>【從這些經(jīng)歷中獲得的專業(yè)能力不足以支撐「我」的職業(yè)發(fā)展,「我」需要在&hellip;&hellip;方面有更多的改善】</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <ul> <li style="text-align: justify;">思路:</li> </ul> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">該主線為:「我」的職業(yè)目標&rarr;為了實現(xiàn)這個職業(yè)目標,「我」在學業(yè)和實踐方面做出的努力&rarr;這些努力還不足以實現(xiàn)自己的職業(yè)目標,「我」還需要在XX方面有進一步的提高。</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><span class="h1">03 角度三:能力提升</span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">My decision to pursue further studies in finance was made during the simulated roadshow for a prestigious food and beverage company - Bestore......Despite the valuable skills I acquired during this project, it particularly <strong><span style="text-decoration: underline;">highlighted my insufficiency in</span></strong> XX, motivating me to embrace a higher degree in finance.</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong>【在給良品鋪子做增發(fā)路演時,「我」發(fā)現(xiàn)自己在XX方面的不足,所以決定深入學習金融專業(yè)】</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">The XX program initially attracted me for its......</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong>【這個專業(yè)吸引我的地方在于&hellip;&hellip;】</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">To prepare for the challenges in my postgraduate journey, I have made continuous endeavors to reinforce my financial competency. Academically, I&rsquo;m equipped with a <strong><span style="text-decoration: underline;">well-grounded</span></strong> mathematical foundation......</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong>【為了迎接研究生生涯的各種挑戰(zhàn),「我」做了持續(xù)的努力。比如學術(shù)方面&hellip;&hellip;】</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">Practically, I practised my financial expertise through the internship at Great Wall Fund Management Co., Ltd. As a sales intern, I ...... This internship enlightened me on the appeal of financial practitioners, who frequently exchange their knowledge of asset values and market laws in the context of capital flows during each transaction. It is in this collision of ideas that the financial industry is constantly developing and innovating, driving me to actualize my worth in this fantastic field.</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong>【實踐方面,「我」進入XX公司實習。這個實習讓我意識到金融從業(yè)者的魅力】</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">My career goals are clearly <strong><span style="text-decoration: underline;">blueprinted</span></strong>. Specifically, I aspire to work in the Investment Banking Department of a HK securities company......</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong>【「我」的職業(yè)目標】</strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <ul> <li style="text-align: justify;">思路:</li> </ul> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">該主線為:「我」在給良品鋪子做增發(fā)路演時發(fā)現(xiàn)自己的不足&rarr;想要通過XX專業(yè)提升自己的專業(yè)能力&rarr;為了迎接研究生生涯的挑戰(zhàn),「我」在學業(yè)和實踐方面做了持續(xù)的努力。</p>
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