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<div class="exprience-item"> <div class="label" contenteditable="false">實(shí)習(xí)經(jīng)歷：</div> <div class="value" contenteditable="false">某期刊數(shù)據(jù)庫實(shí)習(xí)、某國企技術(shù)工程師</div> <div class="operate-wrapper"> <div class="delete"> </div> </div> </div> </div> </div> </div> </div> <span class="znz-autocompleter-operate"> <span class="link-operate"> <span class="toggle">   </span> </span> <span class="card-operate active"> <span class="edit">   </span> <span class="content">   </span> </span> </span></div> <p> </p> </div> <div class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-XMTxdU2zeoRUmlxOm6bc3mWgnPb">美國院校的文書除了常規(guī)的Academic Statement of Purpose,，還會有一些額外的Essay (PHS, DEI Essay 等）來幫助招生官更好的了解學(xué)生，我們今天就從H同學(xué) Cornell 以及 Duke的文書來看看應(yīng)該如何進(jìn)行寫作。</div> <div class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-AcdhdOnMVoEDQhxACxnc9o0ZnEd"> </div> <h1 class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-SUKXdX89EouZW9xUx53cfGObn4d"><span style="color: #ffffff;"><strong>Academic Statement of 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是關(guān)于你的故事，招生官希望通過這個故事了解你的性格、成功、失敗、沖突以及自我發(fā)現(xiàn)的歷程。這些元素可以構(gòu)成一個生動的敘述，通過這個故事，你可以展現(xiàn)出自己的性格特點(diǎn)，包括韌性、堅(jiān)持和不屈不撓的品質(zhì)等。</div> <div class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-UM0vdMkERo6frGxgJBKcEHZrnWc"> </div> <div class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-L2NydnK6Jo7gEZxfwSyceAVKns9">而H同學(xué)所提供的素材也正是一個很好的PHS范例，開篇敘述了H同學(xué)的家庭背景，讓我們了解她出生在一個什么樣的家庭以及這樣的家庭對她產(chǎn)生的影響：想要創(chuàng)業(yè)，做生意，闖出自己的一片天地讓父親刮目相看；緊接著的一個挑戰(zhàn)也可以讓招生官了解H同學(xué)的性格：H同學(xué)本科就讀于加拿大阿爾伯塔大學(xué)，而求學(xué)之路并沒有我們想象中那么輕松，父親的不支持，斷掉了她和母親的經(jīng)濟(jì)來源，但是H同學(xué)并沒有因此而放棄自己的夢想；她向父親說明大學(xué)的學(xué)費(fèi)等以后畢業(yè)之后會全數(shù)還給他，而她也做到了這一點(diǎn)；畢業(yè)參加工作，創(chuàng)建自己的公司。這一路走來，是那么的不容易，而H同學(xué)也很好的堅(jiān)持下來了，我想這也是這篇PHS可以打動招生官的一點(diǎn)吧，從這篇PHS中，我們完全可以看到H同學(xué)的韌性，不服輸，勇于挑戰(zhàn)以及自身較強(qiáng)的能力。</div> <div class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-VRQidSo5zomLaWxfGsncGcZenOe"> </div> <div class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-Q35ydhsEOoxJDUxUYwxcsOL0n9Y">從這一點(diǎn)也可以看出招生官想從PHS里了解你的哪些方面，有時(shí)候很多學(xué)生會陷入一個誤區(qū)，覺得我需要在PHS也提及學(xué)術(shù)相關(guān)的內(nèi)容，要體現(xiàn)我的學(xué)術(shù)能力，其實(shí)也并非如此，從標(biāo)化成績，Academic Statement of Purpose， CV中，招生官已經(jīng)可以了解到你學(xué)術(shù)方面的能力，而在PHS中，就可以從你個人生活的角度出發(fā)，談?wù)勀闼龅降囊恍┐煺?，以及你自己是怎么克服的，這就可以體現(xiàn)你的韌性；談?wù)勀闼龅降奶魬?zhàn)，以及你是怎么去完成這個挑戰(zhàn)，這就可以體現(xiàn)你的挑戰(zhàn)精神以及你解決問題的能力；談?wù)勀愕某晒蛘咦钭屇愀械接谐删透械囊患碌鹊?，可以從這些角度出發(fā)。</div> <div class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-H7JZdmiTuo6qzpxLnFncRNannKd"> </div> <h1 class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-JQF6difbhowKqpxKiTzcY8lgnld"><span style="color: #ffffff;"><strong>Duke 15 Random Things about you</strong></span></h1> <p> </p> <div class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-M7cKdjNGFo5uGQxT3MScyj0jnLb">最后我們來看看Duke 的特殊Essay, 關(guān)于你的15件小事，其實(shí)也就跟上面的PHS有異曲同工之妙，只是更簡短了，招生官主要就是想通過這15件事來了解你是什么樣的人；談?wù)勛约旱呐d趣愛好，談?wù)勛约旱囊恍┯腥さ氖?，大家不要害怕提及關(guān)于自己一些不好的點(diǎn)，重在分享，因?yàn)檫@些都是你與眾不同的點(diǎn)。</div> <div class="ace-line 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